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Tuesday, November 1, 2011

Michael's Analysis of "The Solitude of Self"

In 1848 Elizabeth Stanton played a driving force in Seneca Falls, the first push towards women’s rights. Stanton, from that point on, was a major contributor to the women’s rights movement. In her article, “The Solitude of Self”, she presents an argument to her contemporary audience for women’s rights, by using pathos, logos, and metaphor’s, in an attempt to make them see the importance of a women’s role in society.

From the beginning of the article, Stanton uses logos to appeal to the logic of her audience, in order to convince them to support women’s rights. One of the strongest appeals to logic that Stanton uses is when she says “If we consider her as a citizen, as a member of a great nation, she must have the same rights as all other members, according to the fundamental principles of our government.” (163). by this statement alone, Stanton claims her rights. However, she continues on in her article to then describe how, that just because women have the role of wife, mother, or sister, doesn’t mean that they should be made to act a certain way or do specific things. Women should be allowed to pursue anything that a man can, because she can do it just as well, if not better, than he can.

Stanton also explains that because of the basic need for survival, a woman must be allowed to do, and learn anything she wants. In her description of “Solitude of Self” she describes each person as being alone. No two people are alike, and no two people will every experience the same thing. When the time comes a woman will have to stand alone, without the support of her husband. If when this time comes she must have the necessary skills and experience. The only way to learn and develop these skills and gain experience is to exercise her rights and duties in society, of which, at the time that the article is written, are none.

Pathos, or the appeal to emotion, is also shown in Stanton’s article when she tells a story about a little girl, who on Christmas didn’t receive any presents. The little girl then spent the whole night out in a field, and was found the next day sobbing. Other people, upon hearing about the little girl, sent her many gifts. However, Stanton goes on to explain that “in the hours of her keenest suffering she was thrown wholly on herself for consolation” this appeals to the audiences emotions by making them feel sad for the little girl, and therefore make them more willing to accept Stanton’s argument for women’s rights, because they don’t want to have something similar to the story of the little girl, happen again, when it can be avoided.

Stanton uses many metaphors in her article, which help to give substance to her argument. One such of these metaphors is when she quotes another writer in telling a story of a man who was crossing the Atlantic ocean, and went out on to the deck of the ship at midnight and was utterly “swallowed up in by a tremendous darkness. . . around me lay a huge confusion of rocks, out of which the gigantic ice peaks shot into the measureless blue of the heavens, and against my only feeling was. . . solitude.” This metaphor is a physical representation of “the solitude of self”. That even when you are around people, in the quickness of life, there will be a time, like when he went onto the deck of the ship, where you are utterly and completely alone, and if there is a storm, you need to have the skills to be able to handle it, Skills that you are not able to learn without being able to be an active participant in society.

When first considering the idea of “The Solitude of Self”, it may seem that it isn’t relevant to the argument of women’s rights. However, Stanton, through her use of Logos, Pathos, and metaphors is able to eloquently argue for women’s rights, to give women a place in society, through the idea of “The Solitude of Self”.

8 comments:

  1. Good analysis. It made me want to go back and read some of the things that I obviously missed.
    Um.... in the first paragraph you say "metaphor's" but in the last paragraph you say "metaphors" (wihout apostrophe).
    There were a couple sentences that seemed way too long and I got lost.
    Also, sometimes your language seemed informal. For instance instead of saying, "making them feel sad for the little girl" you could say "making them feel sympathetic." I know it seems ridiculous and tiny but sometimes something like that makes all the difference in how your audience perceives it.
    Anyway, I really liked it and am going to go read this one again. Thanks!

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  2. Good work. There were quite a few grammatical/spelling errors throughout that you might want to clean up: "a women's role," "If when this time comes." In the paragraph where you talked about the little girl not getting anything for Christmas, I think you missed the big argument the author was trying to make. She was appealing to the emotional side of her audience but was trying to make them see the significance of a person's self. It wasn't that her women's rights policies would keep this from happening in the future, she was just using the example to show how everyone must face some things alone, and we should therefore give every person the same rights so that they can better cope when faced with challenges. I think you nailed her other arguments though. Overall, excellent job. Hope this helps.

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  3. I was distracted from your argument by word choice and grammar errors... Your introduction could be a lot stronger. You start off with saying that she "played a driving force", an odd combination of "played an important role" and "was the driving force behind..." ...and you also neglected to say exactly what she did in that particular situation. Grammar errors were simple, consisting mostly of capitalization (. by instead of . By), improper apostrophe usage (metaphor's instead of metaphors) and incorrect plurality (women's instead of woman's) ...even if you have a good argument and well-constructed paper, your audience will not take you seriously if you have grammar errors. Don't forget to read through your paper before you turn it in!

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  4. (1)To start, there are quite a few grammatical erros in the introduction, it is a little distracting. I would point them out, but it looks like Rosalind beat me to it; Except one thing, the author doesn't use "pathos" and "logos" she appeals to them. So make sure you say she "appealed to pathos", etc.

    (2) You don't need to summarize any part of the essay, you need to assume we've all read it (which we have...hopefully). Also, you don't need to explain what a tool is, or what it does, that is also something you should assume we already know.

    (3)Your citations are a little wonky, so I'd take a look at those. Also, do we need two outside sources? I don't remember.

    An a good note: I really liked the tools you chose. Especially the appeal to logos, because that was a huge factor in this essay. Nice job.

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  5. Hooray for women! They're pretty rad, I'd say. Seriously. Elizabeth Cady Stanton: my hero.

    Anyways,nice job in sticking to the thesis. All of your paragraphs led back to the main overarching point and solidified your argument. Sweet. It refers to the thesis, yes, but I would recommend you make your thesis more clear, because the whole article is about her effectiveness but in the first paragraph you say "in an attempt" to get her argument across, giving the impression she was unsuccessful. I totally get what you're going for here, just make sure you are consistent in your argument. Wuuu!

    NEXT! I would suggest checking your sentence structure-- there are a few spots that are confusing and/or would be more effective if you switched things up a bit. For example, in the first sentence you refer to Seneca Falls, but that is the city, not the convention. Oh, and I think it might sound better if you combined the first two sentences to say something like, "...push towards women's rights, and from that point on..." Also, a few sentences later it would make more sense if you said, "... presents her argument for women's rights to her contemporary audience..." instead of going back and forth.

    Then just those few little nippers in grammar:
    *Last sentence of first paragraph should say "a woman's" instead of "a women's"
    *No apostrophe in "metaphors"
    *Take out all the superfluous words-- many of your sentences would be more effective with less words.
    *Instead of saying things like "is shown" or "is used" just say she uses them. The more compact your argument (while still being effective) the better. It should be analysis-dense, not filler-word-dense. Catch my drift? Sweet!

    Keep it up, yo!

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  6. You make a lot of great points!

    Here's a couple of my thoughts (take them how you want)... Throughout the paper use “appeal to pathos” and “appeal to logos.” Some areas of summary are a little redundant. Try and add more about how each specific tool effectively persuades the audience to believe in the importance of the role of women. The example is there and explained, and the tool is explained, just make sure that the ending sentences covers all of the bases. Overall, the analysis was organized and clear. Good job!

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  7. Though there were grammar and spelling errors, I liked the tools that you used to make your point. Good job there. However, I would have liked to see more commentary versus quotes and paraphrasing.

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  8. I think you did a good job of giving a true analysis and not falling into the trap of just summarizing. I think that your conclusion could have been a bit stronger. Yes, you did restate the thesis, but you didn't really show how the thesis developed through the paper.

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